Audience feedback on First Draft:

As i have got feedback for my first draft there were areas that i need to develop:

• The editing needs a little more work in my opening scene where the female appears on the Tyre swing, as it is a little jumpy and needs to be more smoother for the fade in/appearing effect that i am trying to create.
• The play fight scene in the bedroom is a little long so try variation or cross cuts. 
• I love the sequence in the woods with the cross over fade & the female walking around very fast in the background - very effective. 
• Why do they argue? It is not made clear. Does he cheat on her? Is that what leads her to slit her wrists? This part of the narrative needs to be made more clear. 
• Your footage rewinds, is this to demonstrate he wishes he acted differently? Or does it show she does not die as we see them in bed again? Please make this more clear. 
• Need to fill in the blank spaces with footage.